Thank you for applying at Re/Alignment. Before you’re accepted into the game, the appstaff would like to see revisions on the following;

--history edits: We are noticing a number of grammar errors in this section that impact our readability--notably comma splices and tense shifts. Content is good, but a simple clean-up is needed.
--personality elaborations: This needs to be expanded. Consider the basic parts of his personality and go into more detail on how they impact himself and others, or possibly include references from his history on when those personality elements shine.
--power elaborations: We're also looking for some information on his abilities as a transformer, such as what he turns into.
--third person sample: Like the history, this needs to be checked again for grammar errors.

Please post your revisions within 72 hours. If this isn’t enough time, please let us know!