Thank you for applying at Re/Alignment. Before you’re accepted into the game, the appstaff would like to see revisions on the following;

--Please flesh out Pharma’s personality. We’d like to see his actions extrapolated into how they reflect on his character--such as how things change for him in going from good medic to bad, instead of just noting that they change.
--Inventory specifics - examples of tools, if nothing else.
--Please either rewrite your 3rd person sample with paragraph breaks, or give us a new one; a large block of text can be difficult to parse correctly!

Please post your revisions within 72 hours. If this isn’t enough time, please let us know!