Thank you for applying at Re/Alignment. Before you’re accepted into the game, the appstaff would like to see revisions on the following;

--Some of the personality seems to contradict itself, and requires elaboration; how does Jazz being loyal to his friends mesh with him being willing to desert the war if given a chance? Other parts aren’t giving clear cause and effect; how does loving new information and experiences lead to him wanting to desert? Please go over this section
--Watch your written accent; if you’re going to be writing Jazz’s out, we ask that you tone it down or reconsider the phrasing. It is difficult to read as it is, and is coming across with a different dialect that what we remember from the movie (the ‘ahs’ in particular.)

Please post your revisions within 72 hours. If this isn’t enough time, please let us know!