Thank you for applying at Re/Alignment. Before you’re accepted into the game, the appstaff would like to see revisions on the following;
--Personality section needs to be tightened. We like what you are saying here, but there are a number of typos and word repetitions that should be cleaned up (such as ‘friends’ four times in one paragraph). --First Person section needs to be a little longer, to let his personality shine through. We’d like to get a good idea of what Chris sounds like from this! --Third Person should also be elaborated a little bit to give us a better idea of how Chris thinks. --Finally, this is more a note than a revision: His Advent Deck is fine to have and the powers are acceptable! Copy Vent will require a permissions post/permission from whoever it is used on, however.
Please post your revisions within 72 hours. If this isn’t enough time, please let us know!
REVISIONS
--Personality section needs to be tightened. We like what you are saying here, but there are a number of typos and word repetitions that should be cleaned up (such as ‘friends’ four times in one paragraph).
--First Person section needs to be a little longer, to let his personality shine through. We’d like to get a good idea of what Chris sounds like from this!
--Third Person should also be elaborated a little bit to give us a better idea of how Chris thinks.
--Finally, this is more a note than a revision: His Advent Deck is fine to have and the powers are acceptable! Copy Vent will require a permissions post/permission from whoever it is used on, however.
Please post your revisions within 72 hours. If this isn’t enough time, please let us know!